[Essays] November Week1: New Urbanism, Regional Chauvinism, Majoritarian Populism

Hi Nimisha

I read your essay two times. Based on m experience I am sharing with you few points that I felt:

Good points:

1) Your essay is very good and worth reading. Clarity of thought and expression is there and the way you have uploaded it by scanning shows your dedication towards it. Very good. Keep writing.
2) IMO word limit doesn’t matter much, it can be short of 200-250 but even in that if your essay is complete in all sense and in flow of thoughts it is brilliant. But here you are 1000 almost short, lot of time is there I am sure you will improve it.
3)Handwriting is legible clean and 100 times better than at least mine.
4) Grammar and use of words is awesome.

Constructive points in my view:

1)You need to work more on framing structure of an essay. It is not good in my view. Things are lying scattered here and there.

2)You have portrayed Dicey in a wrong way. I suggest you to go through 3 concepts of rule of law of Dicey and then frame an opinion and project it. This will help you in knowing more about due process of law.

3) Rule of law basically means every one is subject to law even the prime minister and president too. Law is supreme! Equality of law, article 14!! Mention it this too if you are writing that. Also explain the event little nicely. For example : You wrote about emergency and how IG through the amendments destroyed the now called basic structure of constitution and later you said next government improved it. You took a brilliant point but ended in bad way. You could have put in a better way how raj narain challenged her fake election and how jagmohan lal showed the brilliant example of rule of law by invalidating it.

4) Topic is of due process of law, you can include following examples too : Indira Sawhney case, KB case, Sahara scam, 2g scam, cwg scam, coal bllock allocation, RG assasinators, Babri case, Gujarat riots, you can cite historical case of warren hasting trial in London, trial of oscar pistorius, hanging of kasab and afzal guru are few finest example that you can cite in this socially economically and politcally nationaly or internationaly. In current you can also give example of lalit narain mishra case, arushi case and kohli case. All thes are good exmples of due process of law in democatic country. Rest afspa you have already cited. While writing for 9/11 case, use name of draconian ‘patriot act’ under which due process of law was harmed. These will increase your words too. Make sure you write about them after putting our own analysis.

5) Try to include quotes too

These are basic points which you keep in mind as what I see. Rewrite same essay again after getting all opinions and inputs.
Over all its good. Well done. I have written few essays on some topics including this too, if you want i can mail it you to understand structure.

hello nimisha, after a long time i am reading a hand written essay which itself is appreciable first. although i am going to take civil service only on 2015 the art of essay writing is what i am doing first now. the entire mains is essay writing type answers without which i dont think reading anything will count.. so I am just giving a honest opinion.If u feel its wrong sorry.But more than appreciation i think a decent criticism is what will be helpful especially in mains . I am going to say a few points which might be helpful in essay paper, most of it everyone knows but do u do that. That s what makes the difference between 60-80 marks and 125&above marks and ultimately decides you getting into services or not.

1.This essay paper is long when we compare it with other general studies papers, (hope no division of compulsory 3 r 4 essays and upsc keeps it to one) so the need to break the flow in a calculative manner to keep the reader interested is a must or else you will lose the edge irrespective of your paper having valid points.

2.some tables ,some food chain diagrams ,chemical equations,venn diagram,ladder formation, and add your own favourite, anything from a angry bird picture to stickman

for eg: IN the democracy and due process of law, you could use all the above said things in your essays very easily . and one in every two pages of those will make the examiner be more patient with reading your points and make him feel the flow much much better.
like CONSTITUTIONAL POWERS+ LEGISLATIVE POWER———->AUTHORITARIAN GOVERNMENTS

CONSTITUTIONAL POWERS+ LEGISLATIVE POWERS—————————–> RESPONSIBLE GOVERNMENTS.
due process of law

In same way you could use stick man name him democracy ,with head in one picture showing it as due process of law and arms and legs are different pillars of democracy and another without head with no due process of law.

3. write a introduction first and use one of the way of drawing a diagram of some kind with it . IT shud be in a way that it will make the reader know that you have understood the question and which way you are going to travel. well just have few ideas for everything before hand so you could just easily do it .a few ways for social issues , some for science and tech and so on .so you don’t have to brain storm too much for it.
4.It is a long essay always remember that. so when a question like the one in democracy is written try to speak from all the associated parties angle. From the theorists of democracy’s PERSPECTIVE , to constitutional makers,from governments perspective, from courts, from general public and within that try to include the TIMELINE of how the thought process from each one s perspective evolved and then go to a inference and finally a good solution or a suggestion or acceptance depending on the question.

5. The main reason i believe this paper itself in upsc is not because to see how much you know in a topic ,that they see in 4 GS papers but they even give choices to select so that they could see how you analyse a topic which you yourself took to write and not forced on you without any choice. thats the reason i think the paper wont change in to 3 r 4 different essays with no choices. they dont want you to write just answers, they want you to write an essay. if someone seriously prepared for mains they will be able to know something about atleast one of the essay that is the thought process behind the questions so that you will know the answer. they just check how you are able to go through with it in a way everyone could follow especially the reader.. as an administrator the though process and making others understand that is what they want.

Anyways very less time for the mains. use the above said venn diagrams,ladder n such in polity n economy n social sector readings for GS papers too just draw it while revising.. no harm in doing one per question in GS papers n optional papers .. you will have time believe that first before going to the exam. hope at least someone reads this and gets 1 extra mark following a single tip from here the time i took to share this is fulfilled even if not i have improved my typing skills and brushed upon my essay writing strategy.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1eyYFPdQU2kRhTZ_0yWWPSTHyEBKwrI2_MIV8fdZSowg/edit?usp=sharing

Regional chauvinism- the biggest threat to federalism

REGIONAL CHAUVINISM
REASONS FOR REGIONAL CHAUVINISM
1. Imbalance in development :
2. Political mismanagement :
3. Psychological alienation :
4. Linguistic diversities :
5. Religious jingoism :
SOCIAL THREAT
POLITICAL THREAT
ECONOMIC THREAT
FIGHTING AGAISNT REGIONAL CHAUVINISM
CONCLUSION